Post by Solitaire Keighley on Dec 2, 2007 23:03:41 GMT -5
Welcome to Hogwarts Family. You're biography is good but there are some things I need to require of you.
First off before I can even re-check your biography, I need to have these questions answered.
1. Do you have any other characters on this site?
2. How much roleplaying experience do you have?
3. What should you always remember? This can be found in the Ministry Laws
These questions are required to give us a bit more information about you. The third one is only to let us know that you have read our Ministry Laws
As far as your biography, it's very good. I just need you to change the year because new members are only allowed a first or second year character. This is stated in our Important Information
Other changes that need to be made will be marked throughout the copy of your bio below in pink. If you feel that you don't understand what I'm asking for in any of these changes feel free to ask.
Name:Karyssa Lontendale
Blood:Pureblood
Age:13
Year:3
House:Slytherin
Pet:eagle owl-Elvira-
Wand:Ebony 12 inches Ashwinder Ash We need to know what type of core the wand has, and it needs to be a canon core, once again check Ministry laws for the list
Physical Description (include eye colour, hair colour (if not natural colours, hair is only allowed to be dyed temporarily in streaks), height, weight, and any other distinctive qualities about your character that isn’t prohibited):Karyssa has indian coloured skin and waist length black hair. She is tall for a girl her age, a trait from her mother's line. are there any distinctive qualities about her? What color are her eyes?
Biography (include your character’s personality, history about their family, hobbies, interests, etc.):Karyssais a Hindu as in all her family, her parents urge her to marry a Hindu pureblood but she doesn't agree with purebloods always being best.
Karyssa has two sisters and one brother, her brother is called Akhilesh and three years older than her, her older by one year sister is named Deeba and her younger by four years sister Aja. Aja, being only nine is frisky as a goat ,hence the name. Akashiran and Deeba are close,who is Akashiran? Akhilesh is friendly to them but doesn't really have time as he has always been the most important according to their father, Acharya. Her mother Almas (Crystalline gemstone) makes use of them being rich and goes around draped with jewlery and silk gliding across rooms barefoot.
Karyssa studies hard and enjoys all subjects, in her spare time after homework Karyssa dances outside or gossips and talks with Deeba.However those are only her hobbies that others know of she also loves-possibly more-being high up and enjoying the wind, staring at the clouds and star gazing, she does not think they undignified she just wishes not many others to know.
Karyssa has been taught since she was born that as she is nearly royal-her father is the brother of the king of India and her mother is the sister of the queen-everyone should bow down to her and give up all their possesions to her. She has no problem with using her influence to hurt the people that don't show her respect, she thinks of her and her sister Deeba as leaders of everyone and her parents only encorouge this belief. Karyssa mostly believes purebloods are best but isn't afraid to realise she is wrong for some people.Karyssa manipulates everyone without second thoughts to get what she wants.
Karyssa's entire family supports the Dark Lord but not having him around anymore means that Karyssa, Deeba, Aja and Akilesh will not have the mark. This needs to say that they supported the Dark Lord, or still support his beliefs even though he is gone.
Akilesh does get on Karyssa's nerves when her father sends him owls daily saying how proud he is, giving him important jobs that in Karyssa's opinion she deserves and how important Akilesh will be.
Karyssa does often get owls from her father though.
When Karyssa was 10 her parents adopted a ten year old girl called Aranrhod who they renamed Aarti.However when she was sorted into Hufflepuff the family immedietly unadopted her and pretented they had had and still didn't, anything to do with her. When Karyssa was eleven they adopted a Slytherin girl from Australia called Medeia, Medeia loved the Gandhis and was spoilt as much as all the children. Karyssa's last name is Lontendale, are her parents' last names different, because you mention the Gandhis here.
There was an accident when Karyssa was nearly thirteen involving spells combining and Medeia ending up deaf the family learned magical latin sign language as they were certainly not going to use the muggle way, they used fiery letters drawn in the air with wands until they all mastered it. Medeia is a capable witch.
Since Karyssa was eight the Gandhis have been living in Wales, this is where they adopted Medeia to live as well
I did find a few contradictions in the bio for Karyssa as far as where her loyalties lie. At the beginning you say that she doesn't agree with purebloods always being best, but then you say that she and her family were supporters of Voldemort, and yet again in another place you still say that Karyssa mostly believes purebloods are best but isn't afraid to realise she is wrong for some people. I must say that this is a bit confusing. Does Karyssa believe that Purebloods are better than everyone else (as most Slytherins do) or even though she's a Slytherin, does she understand that not all times are Purebloods all that are needed in the wizarding world
First off before I can even re-check your biography, I need to have these questions answered.
1. Do you have any other characters on this site?
2. How much roleplaying experience do you have?
3. What should you always remember? This can be found in the Ministry Laws
These questions are required to give us a bit more information about you. The third one is only to let us know that you have read our Ministry Laws
As far as your biography, it's very good. I just need you to change the year because new members are only allowed a first or second year character. This is stated in our Important Information
Other changes that need to be made will be marked throughout the copy of your bio below in pink. If you feel that you don't understand what I'm asking for in any of these changes feel free to ask.
Name:Karyssa Lontendale
Blood:Pureblood
Age:13
Year:3
House:Slytherin
Pet:eagle owl-Elvira-
Wand:Ebony 12 inches Ashwinder Ash We need to know what type of core the wand has, and it needs to be a canon core, once again check Ministry laws for the list
Physical Description (include eye colour, hair colour (if not natural colours, hair is only allowed to be dyed temporarily in streaks), height, weight, and any other distinctive qualities about your character that isn’t prohibited):Karyssa has indian coloured skin and waist length black hair. She is tall for a girl her age, a trait from her mother's line. are there any distinctive qualities about her? What color are her eyes?
Biography (include your character’s personality, history about their family, hobbies, interests, etc.):Karyssais a Hindu as in all her family, her parents urge her to marry a Hindu pureblood but she doesn't agree with purebloods always being best.
Karyssa has two sisters and one brother, her brother is called Akhilesh and three years older than her, her older by one year sister is named Deeba and her younger by four years sister Aja. Aja, being only nine is frisky as a goat ,hence the name. Akashiran and Deeba are close,who is Akashiran? Akhilesh is friendly to them but doesn't really have time as he has always been the most important according to their father, Acharya. Her mother Almas (Crystalline gemstone) makes use of them being rich and goes around draped with jewlery and silk gliding across rooms barefoot.
Karyssa studies hard and enjoys all subjects, in her spare time after homework Karyssa dances outside or gossips and talks with Deeba.However those are only her hobbies that others know of she also loves-possibly more-being high up and enjoying the wind, staring at the clouds and star gazing, she does not think they undignified she just wishes not many others to know.
Karyssa has been taught since she was born that as she is nearly royal-her father is the brother of the king of India and her mother is the sister of the queen-everyone should bow down to her and give up all their possesions to her. She has no problem with using her influence to hurt the people that don't show her respect, she thinks of her and her sister Deeba as leaders of everyone and her parents only encorouge this belief. Karyssa mostly believes purebloods are best but isn't afraid to realise she is wrong for some people.Karyssa manipulates everyone without second thoughts to get what she wants.
Karyssa's entire family supports the Dark Lord but not having him around anymore means that Karyssa, Deeba, Aja and Akilesh will not have the mark. This needs to say that they supported the Dark Lord, or still support his beliefs even though he is gone.
Akilesh does get on Karyssa's nerves when her father sends him owls daily saying how proud he is, giving him important jobs that in Karyssa's opinion she deserves and how important Akilesh will be.
Karyssa does often get owls from her father though.
When Karyssa was 10 her parents adopted a ten year old girl called Aranrhod who they renamed Aarti.However when she was sorted into Hufflepuff the family immedietly unadopted her and pretented they had had and still didn't, anything to do with her. When Karyssa was eleven they adopted a Slytherin girl from Australia called Medeia, Medeia loved the Gandhis and was spoilt as much as all the children. Karyssa's last name is Lontendale, are her parents' last names different, because you mention the Gandhis here.
There was an accident when Karyssa was nearly thirteen involving spells combining and Medeia ending up deaf the family learned magical latin sign language as they were certainly not going to use the muggle way, they used fiery letters drawn in the air with wands until they all mastered it. Medeia is a capable witch.
Since Karyssa was eight the Gandhis have been living in Wales, this is where they adopted Medeia to live as well
I did find a few contradictions in the bio for Karyssa as far as where her loyalties lie. At the beginning you say that she doesn't agree with purebloods always being best, but then you say that she and her family were supporters of Voldemort, and yet again in another place you still say that Karyssa mostly believes purebloods are best but isn't afraid to realise she is wrong for some people. I must say that this is a bit confusing. Does Karyssa believe that Purebloods are better than everyone else (as most Slytherins do) or even though she's a Slytherin, does she understand that not all times are Purebloods all that are needed in the wizarding world